Its not without its flaws, but really nice work guys - get it entered for the 2010 film fest independently! I wonder if the ending should have been shorter? You'd some nice shots there, but possibly better to end on the first shot of Brooke? The character's voice, and move to take the drill, enter an unintentional note of comedy (an oppositional reading?) Make sure you get focussed audience feedback on that
Mine and conor plan to get a lot of audience feedback, I agree about the optional reading, and I like your idea of cutting it out all together! It would make a more dramatic ending!
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Its not without its flaws, but really nice work guys - get it entered for the 2010 film fest independently!
ReplyDeleteI wonder if the ending should have been shorter? You'd some nice shots there, but possibly better to end on the first shot of Brooke? The character's voice, and move to take the drill, enter an unintentional note of comedy (an oppositional reading?)
Make sure you get focussed audience feedback on that
Mine and conor plan to get a lot of audience feedback, I agree about the optional reading, and I like your idea of cutting it out all together! It would make a more dramatic ending!
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