Audience Feedback and Improvements- Final Proposal

Me and Conor made a short powerpoint explaining our idea to the media class, they gave us feedback on our narrative, our working title and our production logo, this audience feedback was filmed so that me and Conor could use it to evaluate our narrative and make some changes.

After watching the footage, here is what me and Conor (Conex) changed: 

Narrative- In our narrative, we had planned to have a male lying dead on the floor and the central protagonist was going to try help him up but wile doing so, pull off his arm. However Dave (our media teacher) suggested that this was not relative to the narrative. He suggested that we take this footage out of our final production.

Narrative- Our class thought that the central protagonist should spend more time exploring through the campsite, this would establish his innocence. They also thought there should be a dead body in one of the tents to signify to the audience better that this was a sight of a murder, the thought we should have a hand lying out of the tent, but the central protagonist will not notice this dead body.

Narrative- Our class also thought that we should use the sound of the crow to attract the central protagonists attention to the house as he is at the campsite, this should be when he looks up at the house and notices the smoke rising from the house and head up towards the house.

We will be applying these changes to our production, this will mean re-writing a new screenplay and writing up our ned idea, this will be completed in the next few days.